Supermassive

I asked an enlightened web-associate (a PHD holder) to look over my series bible and share her thoughts. I expected a long list of issues with my genetics (I’m not a geneticist) and my Earth-changes geography (her focus is climatology). She came back with a few minor crits that are passable because science fiction should be about the imaginary even if it’s based in hard science.

I sat relieved until this: it’s a shame your timeline around Vostok is off. I would suggest altering your settings incept date to the next arrival of  meteor VK.

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A normal person would say fuck it, and I’m tempted. I wrote this series years ago and the timeline reflects this. I’m a writer though, and the notion that I’m off the ledge in terms of present day science drives me fucking insane.

I’ll end up making massive changes to the timeline throughout the bible. Those changes will create a domino effect requiring me to adjust the dates of every damn thing in the series narrative.

Sigh.

First Draft Pass Complete

chapeditsExcised several scenes to tighten my plot but I feel like I’ve sacrificed a bit of characterization in the process. Renamed the book because there’s a movie coming out about the Holodomor in the Ukraine and I don’t want the association. The new title is Tactical Pursuits.

Jogging through the second-draft pass and I can’t shake the feeling that the chapters don’t fit. I know that I’m telling two different stories in this novel – Eppis adjusting her life in preparation of ascension, and Ilo dying as motivation for Velto and Sofita to put aside their differences and work toward ascension. The subplot (at this point I should say, microplot) involves the Slavic Empire and that’s grounded in the Velto/Sofita portion of the book. Eppis/Ilo are connected by their brief complicity in the past, a partnership that afforded them the lives they lived up until now; tying them together at the end of the book is problematic because of a character death. Interweaving the narrative of these two distinct storylines works on television, but in prose, it just feels clunky.

I’m going to keep each storyline together via ‘Part I’ and ‘Part II’ separation, then fuse the stories together at the end.

Shell Follow Up

In the first novel (fully edited – needs beta) the Shell began operating on its own, touching Sofita’s mind without permission, taking over for moments at a time, etc. In the second novel, Sofita follows up with an examination at the holistic lab, but Fyla Uym (Shell’s designer) isn’t there. In her place is Riltav Gwo. The young Hizak is a character that will feature heavily in the series, but in this scene, she makes her debut.

Currently editing this first draft…

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Holiday Accomplishment

I have to step away from revisions, the holiday doesn’t afford me the isolation my mind needs, to fix a manuscript. I’m using this time though, to clean up fuglies throughout my series-bible. The bible will be free to my monthly Patreon supporters, so I want to make it as polished as my ZERO-sum budget, allows.

For the timelines, I thought of incorporating the standard infographic style timeline. There’s plenty of free templates, and as lovely as some of them are, those horizontal lines are just so…human?  The Femmar are a species defined by two constants: ice & genetics. A double-helix style timeline was nowhere to be found (though there’s a ton of wallpapers on the net featuring “DNA”). I found a perfect graphic from a natural-disasters web site, and used the iceberg graph, as my timeline marquee.

timeline

Each era on Earth is divided by time periods, with noted events that shape the world my series is set in. The prehistoric Femati Era (Fematidol), the Human Era (Helovidol), the short and chaotic Time of Transition (Voskadulak), and the Femarctic Era, indicated by their new name for the planet, Ramaxicon. At the start of the Femitokon series, the Ramaxidol has been chugging along, just over 300-years.