Dox Ain’t Having It

“Permission to speak freely, Komad?” Dox said.

Sofita moved closer, “I’ve been waiting for you to do just that.”

Dox had remained silent when Sofita submitted her mission report to Orny’s log recorder. In it she detailed the group encounter she’d engaged in, along with the termination of the leak at Port Yukon. Sofita omitted ordering Dox to hack into a Cloister Admin Cluster, and also left out the subsequent visit from CR Banto.

“Why were we hacking into CR Banto’s system?” asked Dox.

Sofita said, “CR Banto served as a liaison advocate at Nazca Base before her heritage forced her back to Vanda—”

“—heritage?”

“Banto’s the donation of Committee Member the Fourth, Tee Banto,” Sofita said. “She’s duty bound to serve in the Chamber, a prerequisite to ascension.”

“Ascension?” Dox said.

Sofita said, “Someday, she’ll ascend to the Tenth Gen Committee.”

“I thought when your—”

“—when the Primary’s gen-heir died, the Tenth were nullified?”

“Someone at Nazca contacted CR Banto about something related to this mission?”

“CR Banto excels at preserving peer relationships, these associations endure,” said Sofita, sensing more to Dox’s discomfort. “That’s why we invaded her privacy.”

“If I’d known what I was doing,” said Dox. “I wouldn’t have done it.”

“You were under orders,” Sofita leaned back in her chair.

Dox turned back to her console, “Orders I find objectionable,”

“What is it with you Eleventh’s, and hyper-rectitude?” Sofita said.

Dox gave a start, “What’s a helovx girxhole have to do with my Gen?”

“Rectitude is integrity, honor,” said Sofita, laughing.

“Honor’s important, Komad.” Dox said, without a hint of embarrassment. “It’s what separates us from the helovx.”

“I don’t want to make light of your convictions, but only six chromosomes separate us from the helovx, and their rectums.” Sofita said.

“We can’t breed with them, Komad,” the Donmat did her best to remain respectful, “It’s more than a few chromosomes.”

“You’re right, we female Citizens can’t breed with them.”

“We female Citizens? What is it with you Tenth’s and living in the past?” Dox closed her eyes. “Forgive my disrespect, Komad. My generation has no males, they’re obsolette and aren’t part of the everyday vernacular.”

“Did you say vernacular? That’s a complicated word for a bruiser that doesn’t know an helovx ass from her honor.” Sofita became serious, “Life is moribund with each passing moment. Your manifestation of prevalence is obsolete.”

Dox fixed her eyes to the forward array.

“Yet if you wish to pick nits,” Sofita said, “My Gen does have males, as does the Gen before it, as did the Gen before that. You tend to forget this, Donmat, peculiar really, since this Division specializes in matters connected to those particulars—”

“—I didn’t know this section existed,” Dox said, “I only accepted assignment to the Sorority of Defense so I wouldn’t be snapped back to walking the ice.”

“You didn’t want Division?” Sofita said.

“What I want no longer matters, Komad,” Dox said. “Staying on topic, I wasn’t aware our males bred with helovx women, until assignment to the Femitokon Division.”

“Donmat, look at me,” Sofita said.

Dox turned as ordered, “Yes, Komad?”

“Zhang was sired by Carl Crystal,” Sofita said.

“The cult leader from the California’s?” asked Dox.

“No, Caro Cristi, the male farc from Ramaxia,” Softly said. “He was surgically altered to disguise himself.”

“They’ve had him jail for a long time. How have they not figured out what he is?”

“Nauist convicts get no medical care. They get a room with no view, and they’re fed once a day.” Sofita could see that Dox was more annoyed than intrigued, “When he was free, he had children with helovx women. One of them was Pym Zhang, our devoured geneticist.”

“A hybrid seeking repatriation,” Dox said.

Sofita nodded, “Nauists don’t know they have a farc, and the Committee didn’t want them learning about it from Zhang.”

Dox stared at her, “Komad, I don’t like the word farc. It’s a slur.”

“Yes, it is,” Sofita took great care not to grin at the conservative nature of her Donmat. “I won’t say it again.”

“Thank you, Komad.” Dox wasn’t finished with her yet. “I also don’t like it when you fraternize with helovx males. Orta might be okay with us engaging in sexual intercourse with helovx when they’re suspected of being spies and enemies, but I’m not.”

“I appreciate your candor,” Sofita said.

“I’ve no place telling you how to carry out a mission, Komad, but if you’re going to engage in future helovx-violations, I don’t want to know about it, before or after, the fact.” Dox said, then shook her head in anger, “You’re laughing at me,”

Sofita sat up, “I’m not amused in any way.”

“I can see it in your eyes!”

Art for Title Scene I

First I want to say thank you for accepting my commission. (Daniel) The shot will be of Fuzo Dox and Sofita Kul. The pose is simple; it will be the stoic sensei (Kul) and smiling cocky upstart (Dox).

Dox is younger but taller, her body language is relaxed; she’s stoked to be posing and smiling for the picture because she’s new to being on duty and hasn’t seen anyone die yet. Dox has her arm raised and her pinkie up (a Femarctic sign of victory), the other hand is on her hip but obscured by Kul.

Kul is older, a bit shorter, she never relaxes; her arms are crossed over her chest and she does not smile. Kul’s not unhappy, she quite amused at posing for this picture, but Kul has killed people before and so jovial and relaxed isn’t her style.

–Tina

(Tina) Here’s the line sketch I made to show you the proportions, placement, pose and expressions of the characters, I didn’t make the uniforms so you can see the body proportions well, and the background will be visible once I start adding color, please tell me your thoughts on this rough sketch.

—Daniel

Dox and Kul

I knew you’d nail the smile I was looking for (Daniel)! The pose is perfect. Overall impressions? No pointy ears. LOL Kul will be a bit shorter, and her ass is BIG because she’s Hizaki. Dox’ tits can be a bit smaller and her bicep thicker–other than that, you nailed the overall feel of it, great job.

—-Tina

Nope

I’ve been avoiding the inevitable.

Splitting Tactical Pursuits (aka Holodomor) into two parts isn’t working.

On Monday I’m going to remove all the elements of the secondary plot and focus solely on Sofita’s mission and Velto Wram’s entry into the series.

The excised portions, Eppis Banto’s story, will be edited for release to Patreon subscribers. I think this may be the norm going forward for all the backstory/related-narrative of those in Sofita’s circle. It will allow me to remain focused on Sofita’s story arc, without sacrificing the stories of the ensemble cast (Eppis, Pitana, Velto, Laxum, and Fyla) sharing in Sofita’s goal.

Shell Follow Up

In the first novel (fully edited – needs beta) the Shell began operating on its own, touching Sofita’s mind without permission, taking over for moments at a time, etc. In the second novel, Sofita follows up with an examination at the holistic lab, but Fyla Uym (Shell’s designer) isn’t there. In her place is Riltav Gwo. The young Hizak is a character that will feature heavily in the series, but in this scene, she makes her debut.

Currently editing this first draft…

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Revisions: Suffocation

Chapter 17 – 

It had been over twenty hours since they departed Brasilia’s waters, and Sofita still hadn’t reacquired sight of Doctor Vai Zhang. She roamed topside unseen, thanks to the invisibility afforded her by the Shell.

On the horizon was the Anzhu Island.

Covered by snowy mounds, it was the site of the first Femarctic camp erected by Bizaki engineers of the Robust Generation, those sent to build Chinasia’s remote power stations. The ice and snow of the northern polar region reminded her why the Reaping Gen of old spent so much time developing solidification-tech.

Sofita thought briefly of the bartender at Yukon Beach.

The woman was right in her suspicion that the Femmar were capable of creating glaciers. It was just a matter of time before the Primary would initiate a complete icing up the northern polar region, and she’d carry it out from their sole solidification-station in the Markov Basin.

Sofita didn’t dwell on the moral implications freezing the world, but her Donmat was another story.

Donmat Fuzo Dox displayed an active dislike of the helovx, but when Sofita proposed the rounding up of all the men back in Yukon, for viral termination—an admittedly extreme solution to the suspected leak there—young Dox had vehemently protested. She reminded Sofita that not all the helovx men at Yukon were sex-workers. Some of them were the partners of those working, and many of them were raising donations.

It had been a Pure-Gen scented argument bogged down with too much regard for the helovx, and too little consideration for the task, at hand. Dox held helovx males in disdain, but she wasn’t about to arbitrarily murder them.

For this, Sofita felt a bubble of pride build in the pit of her gut.

Femitokon: Editorial Process 2014

Much has changed as outlines are approved, revisions are made based on suggestions–and entire scenes are excised to maintain narrative flow.  It’s a dance I’ve never been happy with–but it’s required.

“Suffocation”
Femarctic Komad (Commander) Sofita Kul and Donmat (Ensign) Fuzo Dox are ordered to retrieve the body of Chinasia’s top bio-geneticist Pym Zhang. When Kul discovers that Zhang’s genetic creations are tied to her Ramaxian homeland, she sets out to destroy them.

Form: Introductory novella
Notes: Mission focused plot; Sofita-centric, Jal Bos introduced.
Series Characters: Laxum Jyr, Pitana Dag, and Eppis Banto.
Antagonists: Vai Zhang (human), Cao-Cy (human), Terry and Tara Whitley (human).

**

“Holodomor”
After the death of their Empress, the Slavic Empire puts her son Grand Duke Mikołaj on the throne, an action that results in the dissolution of their diplomatic treaty with Ramaxia. When Komad Kul and Donmat Dox arrive to retrieve Ambassador Velto Wram and her wife Ilo, they discover that Mikołaj’s advisers, the Brothers Kotko, are unwilling to part with the technology given to them.

Form: Novel
Notes: Flashback intensive; Sofita-centric from other chara POV
Series Characters: Ilo Cux, Velto Wram, Fyla Uym, Bo Kilvx, and Fusada Kul (deceased).
Antagonists: Boris and Yuri Kotko, the Slavic Empire, Lekada Wram.

**

“Memory Kill
As young Dox lies in critical condition on board the Orcinus, Sofita’s ambitions for rule are rekindled when she’s given the private journals of her dead sister Fusada. When sensors indicate a tsunami bound for Zealand, a message from Ramaxia orders Kul to the Tasmanian Sea, to retrieve files detrimental to the Citizenry.

Form: Novel
Notes: Flashback intensive; Mission Focused
Series Characters: Velto Wram, Fyla Uym, Bo Kilvx, Jal Bos and Fusada Kul (deceased); Koba Julo, Lekada Wram, Uli Zag, Deborah Chase (human).
Antagonists: Adam Peirce (human), Lekada Wram, nature.

**

“Tribal Warfare”
A North American Union research community is attacked by roaming nomads, led by the insane hybrid known as ‘Utahraptor Sil’.  In order to locate him, Kul visits Sil’s father, Caro Cristi, a full blooded Femarctic male hiding as a human, imprisoned for his role as a destructive cult leader. Hot on Kul’s trail is human operative Adam Peirce, determined to discover the secret of the Femitokon Shell.

Form: Novel
Notes: Mission focused plot; Femitokon still holds Fusada Kul.
Obiz Banto and Kin Balru introduced.
Series Characters: Velto Wram, Eppis Banto, Laxum Jyr, Pitana Dag, Fyla Uym, Jal Bos.
Antagonists: Caro Cristi, Tara Whitley (human), Adam Peirce (human), Utahraptor Sil (hybrid), Red Eli, Badlands Gang (human), Nephis Uym (unnamed).

**

“Subversive Humanitarianism”
Kul is forced from medical recovery to retrieve Ambassador Laxum Jyr, taken hostage by a gang of Zealand pirates led by Nephis Uym, a young Femarctic male with highly advanced psychokinetic abilities. Kul’s mission is hindered when she discovers Dox has absconded with the Ornith, to save her first love from being terminated for subversive humanitarianism, by the deadly Femarctic operative, Styba Balru.

Form: Novel
Notes: Styba Balru and Tavo Ex are introduced. Fuzo and Styba, history. Nephis Uym and Sofita Kul, history.
Series Characters: Laxum Jyr, Pitana Dag, Velto Wram, Eppis Banto, Fyla Uym, Bo Kilvx, Basuki Clan (humans).
Antagonists: Nephis Uym, Mana Men (human gang), Cao-Cy (human), Ryo Uym, Fusa Kul, Lekada Wram, Gid Ikat.

**

“Silence is Golden”  
Pitana Dag’s longing for an old love complicate her relationship with human ambassador Deborah Chase. Political fallout from Laxum Jyr’s abduction results in the removal of the Prime Chair of the GDP, but when Fyla Uym is suspected of murdering the fallen politician, Sofita’s forced to sacrifice an old friend to ensure their Gen-Heirs remain hidden.

Form: Novel
Notes: Pitana-centric plot; Fyla-centric sub-plot; Dak Perkad, Pik Cux, Crix Utabi, and Riltav G’wo are introduced. As are Hib Perkad, Yir Avi, Kel’r Ateel, and Ixo Gizul.
Series Characters: Velto Wram, Bo Kilvx, Sofita Kul, Deborah Chase (human), Eppis Banto, Laxum Jyr, Yir Gizul, Tavo Ex (Ib Sil), Ozbi Banto.
Antagonists: Riba Wygz, Wox Dag, Rasa Jyr, Ryo Uym, Fusa Kul, Lekada Wram, Tee Banto, Adam Peirce (human), John Perry (human), Jeanette Dubois (human).  

**

“Permanent Stain”  
Laxum Jyr and Eppis Banto struggle with childhood demons while coming to terms with their place in Ramaxia’s future, while Styba Balru and Obiz Banto and the other Eleventh-Gen heirs, find their allegiances tested when the Primary declares war on humanity.

Form: Novel
Notes: Eleventh-Gen plot-centric; war on humanity. Ebival Kul is introduced.
Series Characters: Obiz Banto, Crix Utabi, Styba Balru, Fuzo Dox, Riltav G’wo, Yir Avi, Tavo Ex (Ib Sil), Fezil Banto, Zebi Bol, Kel’r Ateel, Velto Wram, Crizal Dox, Sofita Kul, Laxum Jyr, Eppis Banto, Hib Perkad, Deborah Chase (human).
Antagonists: Pitana Dag, Gid Ikat, Fusa Kul, Ryo Uym, Lekada Wram, Tee Banto, Adam Peirce (human), John Perry (human), Jeanette Dubois (human).

**

“Ascension”
Sophita Kul, Eppis Banto, Fyla Uym, Laxum Jyr, Velto Wram, and Pitana Dag, challenge the Primary and her Committee for control of Ramaxia. On the eve of their coup, Nephis Uym returns, handicapped from his last bout with Sofita, determined to kill Sofita’s gen-heir and destroy her chance to ascend.

Form: Final Novel
Notes: Tenth-Gen centric, mission centric.
Series Characters: All Femarctic characters, including Jal Bos and Orestes Uym.
Antagonists: Fusa Kul, Ryo Uym, Lekada Wram, Tee Banto, Rasa Jyr, Gid Ikat, Nephis Uym, Riltav G’wo.