Nope

I’ve been avoiding the inevitable.

Splitting Tactical Pursuits (aka Holodomor) into two parts isn’t working.

On Monday I’m going to remove all the elements of the secondary plot and focus solely on Sofita’s mission and Velto Wram’s entry into the series.

The excised portions, Eppis Banto’s story, will be edited for release to Patreon subscribers. I think this may be the norm going forward for all the backstory/related-narrative of those in Sofita’s circle. It will allow me to remain focused on Sofita’s story arc, without sacrificing the stories of the ensemble cast (Eppis, Pitana, Velto, Laxum, and Fyla) sharing in Sofita’s goal.

Cleaning Up a Monster

I completed the second novel in the Femitokon series, Holodomor, during NaNoWriMo of 2013.  First drafts are the easy part, and yes, you can conceivable write a novel in 30 DAYS, so long as you know that no first draft is ever ready for prime time.

NaNoWriMo

As you can see from the image above, I wrote the first novel in the Femitokon series, titled Suffocation, during NaNoWriMo 2011—it’s now 2015, and Suffocation is nearing its creative end, undergoing final revisions with a paid editor, before I can schlep it to an agent.

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First Draft Redux

The clean up on Memory Kill’s plot turned extensive.  I finished writing the first draft at the start of 2014, but true revisions won’t start until the edits on Suffocation and Holodomor are complete.

Unlike Holodomor, which needed a few chapters shuffled around for flow, and some dialog cleaned up for continuity, Memory Kill requires much more. After carding-out each chapter, I realized the hardest struggle in Fusada Kul’s life wasn’t conquering the Femitokon Shell—it was dealing with the distance that had developed between her and her twin, Sofita Kul.

Fusada Kul in Bible

It’s great drama sure, but their weakened relationship can’t be the focus of the novel. It can be a subplot, but it can’t be Fusada’s primary purpose. Readers won’t understand the sacrifice Fusada makes in Memory Kill, until the last novel in the series (Ascension), when Sofita comes to understand what Fusada really did in their hibernation-room, and why. Fusada’s obsession must revolve around making the Shell work for her, no matter who or what it costs. The reader should believe (righteously with what facts they have on hand until the final-novel) that Fusada’s nature turned bad after Sofita alienated herself.

The current draft of Memory Kill showcases a past-tense protagonist, that’s too sympathetic. I need readers to wonder if Fusada became the enemy. I’ll write new scenes, change dialog to reflect new motivations, and stay true to the science of Fusada’s near-success in overcoming the Shell—but I cannot let slip Fusada’s true intentions, even if I know them already…

Femitokon: Editorial Process 2014

Much has changed as outlines are approved, revisions are made based on suggestions–and entire scenes are excised to maintain narrative flow.  It’s a dance I’ve never been happy with–but it’s required.

“Suffocation”
Femarctic Komad (Commander) Sofita Kul and Donmat (Ensign) Fuzo Dox are ordered to retrieve the body of Chinasia’s top bio-geneticist Pym Zhang. When Kul discovers that Zhang’s genetic creations are tied to her Ramaxian homeland, she sets out to destroy them.

Form: Introductory novella
Notes: Mission focused plot; Sofita-centric, Jal Bos introduced.
Series Characters: Laxum Jyr, Pitana Dag, and Eppis Banto.
Antagonists: Vai Zhang (human), Cao-Cy (human), Terry and Tara Whitley (human).

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“Holodomor”
After the death of their Empress, the Slavic Empire puts her son Grand Duke Mikołaj on the throne, an action that results in the dissolution of their diplomatic treaty with Ramaxia. When Komad Kul and Donmat Dox arrive to retrieve Ambassador Velto Wram and her wife Ilo, they discover that Mikołaj’s advisers, the Brothers Kotko, are unwilling to part with the technology given to them.

Form: Novel
Notes: Flashback intensive; Sofita-centric from other chara POV
Series Characters: Ilo Cux, Velto Wram, Fyla Uym, Bo Kilvx, and Fusada Kul (deceased).
Antagonists: Boris and Yuri Kotko, the Slavic Empire, Lekada Wram.

**

“Memory Kill
As young Dox lies in critical condition on board the Orcinus, Sofita’s ambitions for rule are rekindled when she’s given the private journals of her dead sister Fusada. When sensors indicate a tsunami bound for Zealand, a message from Ramaxia orders Kul to the Tasmanian Sea, to retrieve files detrimental to the Citizenry.

Form: Novel
Notes: Flashback intensive; Mission Focused
Series Characters: Velto Wram, Fyla Uym, Bo Kilvx, Jal Bos and Fusada Kul (deceased); Koba Julo, Lekada Wram, Uli Zag, Deborah Chase (human).
Antagonists: Adam Peirce (human), Lekada Wram, nature.

**

“Tribal Warfare”
A North American Union research community is attacked by roaming nomads, led by the insane hybrid known as ‘Utahraptor Sil’.  In order to locate him, Kul visits Sil’s father, Caro Cristi, a full blooded Femarctic male hiding as a human, imprisoned for his role as a destructive cult leader. Hot on Kul’s trail is human operative Adam Peirce, determined to discover the secret of the Femitokon Shell.

Form: Novel
Notes: Mission focused plot; Femitokon still holds Fusada Kul.
Obiz Banto and Kin Balru introduced.
Series Characters: Velto Wram, Eppis Banto, Laxum Jyr, Pitana Dag, Fyla Uym, Jal Bos.
Antagonists: Caro Cristi, Tara Whitley (human), Adam Peirce (human), Utahraptor Sil (hybrid), Red Eli, Badlands Gang (human), Nephis Uym (unnamed).

**

“Subversive Humanitarianism”
Kul is forced from medical recovery to retrieve Ambassador Laxum Jyr, taken hostage by a gang of Zealand pirates led by Nephis Uym, a young Femarctic male with highly advanced psychokinetic abilities. Kul’s mission is hindered when she discovers Dox has absconded with the Ornith, to save her first love from being terminated for subversive humanitarianism, by the deadly Femarctic operative, Styba Balru.

Form: Novel
Notes: Styba Balru and Tavo Ex are introduced. Fuzo and Styba, history. Nephis Uym and Sofita Kul, history.
Series Characters: Laxum Jyr, Pitana Dag, Velto Wram, Eppis Banto, Fyla Uym, Bo Kilvx, Basuki Clan (humans).
Antagonists: Nephis Uym, Mana Men (human gang), Cao-Cy (human), Ryo Uym, Fusa Kul, Lekada Wram, Gid Ikat.

**

“Silence is Golden”  
Pitana Dag’s longing for an old love complicate her relationship with human ambassador Deborah Chase. Political fallout from Laxum Jyr’s abduction results in the removal of the Prime Chair of the GDP, but when Fyla Uym is suspected of murdering the fallen politician, Sofita’s forced to sacrifice an old friend to ensure their Gen-Heirs remain hidden.

Form: Novel
Notes: Pitana-centric plot; Fyla-centric sub-plot; Dak Perkad, Pik Cux, Crix Utabi, and Riltav G’wo are introduced. As are Hib Perkad, Yir Avi, Kel’r Ateel, and Ixo Gizul.
Series Characters: Velto Wram, Bo Kilvx, Sofita Kul, Deborah Chase (human), Eppis Banto, Laxum Jyr, Yir Gizul, Tavo Ex (Ib Sil), Ozbi Banto.
Antagonists: Riba Wygz, Wox Dag, Rasa Jyr, Ryo Uym, Fusa Kul, Lekada Wram, Tee Banto, Adam Peirce (human), John Perry (human), Jeanette Dubois (human).  

**

“Permanent Stain”  
Laxum Jyr and Eppis Banto struggle with childhood demons while coming to terms with their place in Ramaxia’s future, while Styba Balru and Obiz Banto and the other Eleventh-Gen heirs, find their allegiances tested when the Primary declares war on humanity.

Form: Novel
Notes: Eleventh-Gen plot-centric; war on humanity. Ebival Kul is introduced.
Series Characters: Obiz Banto, Crix Utabi, Styba Balru, Fuzo Dox, Riltav G’wo, Yir Avi, Tavo Ex (Ib Sil), Fezil Banto, Zebi Bol, Kel’r Ateel, Velto Wram, Crizal Dox, Sofita Kul, Laxum Jyr, Eppis Banto, Hib Perkad, Deborah Chase (human).
Antagonists: Pitana Dag, Gid Ikat, Fusa Kul, Ryo Uym, Lekada Wram, Tee Banto, Adam Peirce (human), John Perry (human), Jeanette Dubois (human).

**

“Ascension”
Sophita Kul, Eppis Banto, Fyla Uym, Laxum Jyr, Velto Wram, and Pitana Dag, challenge the Primary and her Committee for control of Ramaxia. On the eve of their coup, Nephis Uym returns, handicapped from his last bout with Sofita, determined to kill Sofita’s gen-heir and destroy her chance to ascend.

Form: Final Novel
Notes: Tenth-Gen centric, mission centric.
Series Characters: All Femarctic characters, including Jal Bos and Orestes Uym.
Antagonists: Fusa Kul, Ryo Uym, Lekada Wram, Tee Banto, Rasa Jyr, Gid Ikat, Nephis Uym, Riltav G’wo.