Category: writing

Dialogue Excerpt

Former politician and industrialist Velto Wram is currently assigned as an Ambassador to the Slavic Empire; her ex-beauty Queen spouse Ilo Cux is with her. (first-draft edits, Tactical Pursuits)

Ilo Cux

“How can you tell when they’re pregnant, they’re all so thin.” Velto had paused to gawk at Ilo. “Maybe the ones you’re seeing aren’t pregnant. Maybe they’re just, healthy.”

“I can smell a pregnant helovx,” Ilo said, applying some sea-salt moisturizer to her legs.

“What do they smell like?” asked Velto, hypnotized by Ilo’s fingertips rolling smoothly over her voluptuous folds.

“Stink aside, I can hear the secondary heartbeat,” said Ilo.

Velto said, “I have a heartbeat,”

“You want my attention, doe?” Ilo asked.

Velto’s large round eyes shone back at her.

“Let’s list everything you did wrong tonight,” Ilo said.

Velto turned away, “That’s not the attention I was after!”

“Velts, you’re like a punch in the face,” Ilo said.

Velto Wram

Velto knitted her brow, “I’m a pleasure to be around!”

“Why can’t you just be nice?”

“I’m the nicest citizen I know!”

“You’re a massive girxhole, Velts.”

As Velto folded up her stretching matt, Ilo reclined on the bed.

“Velto, do you remember the first time we got together?”

“At the Gathering Center in Mynu,” Velto’s tail of hair swung side to side as she collected Ilo’s discarded clothes from the floor.

Scooting to the edge of the bed, Ilo planted her feet to the floor.

“That’s not the first time!”

“It was in Mynu during that Prime Citizen social. I remember distinctly because all you bellies were there and I wanted to—” Velto paused, “Wait, you said got together? We got together for the first time, in Toxis.”

“What were you going to say?” Ilo narrowed her eyes, “You said you remembered because wanted to, wanted to what?”

“I’m going to bathe,” Velto tossed the clothes at Ilo and then pointed, “Your attitude better be different when I come back out.”

“Enjoy that tub, you’re the only one of us that fits in it!”


I’ve been avoiding the inevitable.

Splitting Tactical Pursuits (aka Holodomor) into two parts isn’t working.

On Monday I’m going to remove all the elements of the secondary plot and focus solely on Sofita’s mission and Velto Wram’s entry into the series.

The excised portions, Eppis Banto’s story, will be edited for release to Patreon subscribers. I think this may be the norm going forward for all the backstory/related-narrative of those in Sofita’s circle. It will allow me to remain focused on Sofita’s story arc, without sacrificing the stories of the ensemble cast (Eppis, Pitana, Velto, Laxum, and Fyla) sharing in Sofita’s goal.

Shell Follow Up

In the first novel (fully edited – needs beta) the Shell began operating on its own, touching Sofita’s mind without permission, taking over for moments at a time, etc. In the second novel, Sofita follows up with an examination at the holistic lab, but Fyla Uym (Shell’s designer) isn’t there. In her place is Riltav Gwo. The young Hizak is a character that will feature heavily in the series, but in this scene, she makes her debut.

Currently editing this first draft…


First Stage Edits: Holodomor

My 1st draft edits involve tightening the plot and fixing the dialog. I read my first draft (first time since writing it) and then went through and adjusted my scene cards, cutting any scene that added nothing to the overall story.


This part is the worst.

I ended up removing scenes that I adored. I’ve quite a collection of scenes now excised from Suffocation and Holodomor. Some are brilliant character pieces, while others are pure pornographic trash. I think when I release the series on Patreon, I will tighten these scenes up and offer them as freebies to my patrons.

Bible Excerpt: Anatomy

Bizak, Subak, Marix, Zaxir, and Hizak

Anatomical Basics

  • The Femmar are engineered before birth into four castes.
    • Bizaki, Subaki, Marixi, Zaxiri, Hizaki
  • Average height range of a typical adult is 6’5” to 7’5”
  • The Femmar have 280 bones and 52 chromosomes.
  • Femarctic craniums are thicker that of the helovx, and their brains larger, with greater synaptic interconnectivity.
  • The Femmar have 38 teeth; the fronts are lobed, pointed, and cusped, for grasping and tearing food. Back teeth are thick and flat, for crushing bone and shells.
  • The Femmar have off-white sclera, and gold/bronze irises.
    • Femarctic eyes contain a protein in the vitreous that breaks down abrasives and protests against natural lachrymators. Their eyes also include a layer of tissue called tapetum lucidum, which allows them to see in the dark.
  • The Femmar have no vellum, axillary, or androgenic hair; all terminal hair is black.
    • Only the Marix-caste has no terminal hair.
  • The Femmar have eight layers of counter-shaded skin (dark throughout, but light to white along their chests, abdomen, and pelvic girdle), with a seam of skin called uzx, marking where the lighter chest and abdominal skin meets with the darker external hide.
    • Femarctic hides come in a variety of colors, from bronze and brown to various shades of gray and blue, with patterns ranging from light stripes to mottled spots–some Femmar have no patterns at all.


  • Femmar have what helovx consider to be ‘breasts,’ called suzsch. Suzsch are globes of subcutaneous fat over the chest.
    • Down the middle of each suzsch is the sensitive uzx.
      (Only the Marixi have differing suzsch and uzxi – see below).
  • All Femmar have a guzshlix (vagina), and a girxil,  a genito-anal slit used to expel urine and feces. The folds of the guzshlix are called the gashcol, and crowning the folds is a rydok (clitoris).
    • The opening of the guzshlix (vagina) is set where a human wears her pubis and navel; the elongated folds of the gashcol run vertically between the hips. An inch below the lower end of the gashcol is the girxil.
  • All Femmar, except Marixi, have a makodux (uterus) and a makzol (cervix); the Zaxiri have dual-makodux.

All Femmar produce a hormone called mitokerotein, a steroid not found in any other species on Ramaxicon. MitoK developed independently within the last generation of subjects engineered by the Femaki’xirpaxul. Helovxi calls MitoK ‘Femarctic Testosterone’, but no studies have been able to confirm any similarity to the testosterone found in helovx.

The Femarctic renal system is capable of processing salt water, allowing for safe digestion of saline. The Femmar also have an epigonal organ.